Infected by invalid praising
While capturing the stench of barbarians
Drinking the black blood of the good
”Pay me and you will receive Christ”
The wrong doing of the white
The corruption of the good
The endless maze to heaven
For the ones that tried
Crucify all the rich to end the stench
Endless falling, no way out
The loop worms are covering the cross
Invite to another to baptize and so to be blinded
The scripts of the book bring false hope
Killing all those who walk to forgive my heart
Submitting only to the true evil deep in my soul
To only wonder if that place is true in the skies
Confessing all the good in me for it does me no good
Praying and kindness is God in disguise
Blaspheme and treason are excuses to slay
And the church blames me for their injustice
It’s the cross you hide behind
Looks like its on flames
bethany
mmmm hate
This is really good
*pop outa the bushes and rapes u*
but as for the poem, i think maybe the lines were a little long. my opinion. other than that, it's all good to me!
~Brittany~
i disliked the first stanza immensely. for some reason, im completely against the word choice and find it too.. im thinking corny? but i dont think thats the right word. too planned, too forced perhaps. at any rate, i dont like it. oh and just work on the flow a little more, parts were a tad choppy.
that aside (and i really do think you are an amazing writer, im just being honest so dont hate me